Show don't tell

The Game

As the ball came sailing through the air towards Richie, he knew that what happened over the next few moments could decide the outcome of the game for his team.

With his team-mates all watching him, and a thousand eyes glued to his every move from the sidelines, Richie gulped. His heart pounded inside his chest as he reached his frozen hands into the air to catch the ball…

The ball slipped into his hands and he dropped back down to the ground. He sprinted around his opponent and dashed to the try-line. 

His ribs racked and his eyes bulged. His heartbeat sped up and his legs felt numb. His rival was right behind him, running with all his might. When he was nearly at the try-line, his competitor tackled him, hard. He didn’t give up so he  gave the ball to his teammates.

“Mccaw, Smith, Moody, Whitelock, Mccaw, he runs to the try-line, he launches off the ground, The English players breathing on his neck, yet scores a try in the last minute of extra time!!!”

Richie was burning with pride as his teammates celebrate their victory. His face was shimmering and smiled with a broad grin. 

He jogged up the pedestal to receive the World Cup. His eyes lit up like fireworks and a gigantic smirk spread across his face. 

Today we had to write about show don't tell. Which is showing the viewer but not telling.