Show don't tell examples

Show DON’T Tell

• It was cold at the beach

           The bitter sand crunched under my feet as the icy cold water washed up to my numb feet.

• The house needed repairs.

The floorboards creaked and the mouldy roof wobbled in the wind. The smashed windows gave an eerie feeling to the house.

• Mum was angry.

Her eyes turned a tomato red and her fists clenched into balls. Her teeth gritted so hard I thought that her teeth would snap any second. Her cheeks started puffing and her eyes fixed on my every move.

• He scored a try.

He sidestepped his opponents and spun past multiple people. He launched off the ground and he flew just over the try-line.

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